Tone and atmosphere are fantastic.  A clear and compelling grasp of the genre combined with solid local color.  Grammar aside, immersion wasn't a problem.  I loved the slang, and in general I liked the immersive assumptions of not defining it.  However, I would be careful not to imply too much without a reasonable expectation of interpretation (for example: took me too long to figure out "del" = delivery).

Pacing was also solid, although more difficult to evaluate from a single sample size.  Every time I thought it was about to get dull, it moved on to the next thing.  The reflective inclusion of the pre-history was exquisitely subtle and well-timed.

Environmental descriptions were excellent, but physical descriptions of the characters themselves was both inconsistent and generally lacking in comparison.

Plot is obviously unanalyzed based on a single chapter* sample.

... and even though I'm not supposed to feedback the grammar, omg paragraph breaks.  More of them.  Now please rofl.  

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZBJ5obr6uzUBe-SgjcR_okfprToD9Uzshw51DV6FPyc/edit?usp=sharing      this should be chapter 2

@jaquin https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZBJ5obr6uzUBe-SgjcR_okfprToD9Uzshw51DV6FPyc/edit?usp=sharing

Chapter 2 consistent with Ch1.  Feedback is pretty much the same here.  Solid pacing, consistent tension, and of course horrible paragraph structure rofl.